My Immortal - With Commentary by Yours Truly!

Yep, I'm bored, and I came across my Immortal again, so I thought, why not? =P
There have been a few other people on here who've done commentaries, and they were quite amusing, so I thought I'd give it a shot too. X)

This is some messed up fanfiction written by the infamous, Tara Gilesbie. Perhaps one of the best trolls of all time, that, or she had absolutely no idea how the HP series went! XD

My commentary is all the bolded words.

Read for the lulz and enjoy!

Chapter 1


AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik totally "goffik", I can tell) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling she could have helped with the plot too... no? OK U rok! yay! =D Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! Yay! Another shout out! MCR ROX! Basically, everything "rox" and we're all cool.


Hi my name is Ebony Dark’ness Dementia Raven Way ahhh, I can see your parents chose your name randomly outta a hat, maybe they were playing Mad Libs at the time? Also, ain't dementia a mental illness? I guess that explains your dress sense down below and I have long ebony black hair I thought ebony was already black? (that’s how I got my name cos of course babies have black hair when they're born) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don’t know who she is get da hell out of here! aww, but you're discouraging potential readers here!). I’m not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he’s a major fùcking hottie ohh, lets bring in the incest!. I’m a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin. I’m also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England actually it's in Scotland somewhere where I’m in the seventh year (I’m seventeen). I’m a goth (in case you couldn’t tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there but, aren't you were a witch? They don't shop at Hot Topic last time I checked. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots and were you giving free lap dances too?. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation cos you weren't already pale enough, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining wait, it can snow and rain at the same time?! so there was no sun I would have thought so, I mean, you're witnessing an impossible meteorological phenomenon here, lady!, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. That was rude, you're the one who's dressed like a stripper, you can't blame them for staring.

“Hey Ebony!” shouted a voice. you know, a voice I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy! DRAMATIC SUSPENSE AS WE ALL TAKE THAT IN!

“What’s up Draco?” I asked. Yeah, sup, bro?

“Nothing.” he said shyly.

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. wow, talk about leaving someone hanging...


AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! Evidently the author totally ignored the people reviewing this.

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