My Immortal- With my commentary >:D

Since I got so many comments/likes on my Lovestruck commentary, I've decided to do a commentary on the notorious "My Immortal."

All my commentary will be in bold.

Do not read if you feel like you will take offense. This is a joke served justly.
Also, there is some swearing in here, some on my part, some on the Author's. Just a warning.

Chapter 7

Chapter 7

AN: wel ok u guyz im only writting dis cuz I got 5 god reviuws Yeah, by 5 people trolling the rest of the world. n BTW I wont rite da nxt chapter til I git TIN god vons! STO FLAMING OR ILL REPORT U! Evony isn't a Marie Sue ok she isn't perfect SHES A SATANITS! n she has problemz shes depressed 4 godz sake!

Draco and I held our pale white hands with black nail polish as we went upstairs. I was wearing red Satanist sings on my nails in red nail polish (AN: c doez dat sound lik a Maru Sue 2 u? Just because you don't want her to sound like a Mary Sue... then yeah, it sounds like a Mary Sue.). I waved to Vampire. Dark misery was in his depressed eyes. I guess he was jealous of me that I was going out with Draco. If he's jealous that you're going out with Draco, then that implies he likes Draco, not you. Anyway, I went upstairs excitedly with Draco. We went into his room and locked the door. Then…

We started frenching passively and we took off each others clothes enthusiastically. He felt me up before I took of my top. Then I took off my black leather bra and he took off his pants. We went on the bed and started making out naked and then he put his boy's thingy in mine and we HAD SECS So hard core. (c is dat stupid? Snort yeah it is)

"Oh Draco, Draco!" I screamed while getting an orgaaaaaasm when all of a sudden I saw a tattoo I had never seen before on Draco's arm. It was a black heart with an arrow through it. On it in bloody gothic writing were the words… Vampire!

I was so angry.

"You baaaastard!" I shouted angrily, jumping out of the bed.

"No! No! But you don't understand!" Draco pleaded. But I knew too much.

"No, you fvcking idiot!" I shouted. "You probably have AIDs anyway!" If you knew this before proceeding to have intercourse, then why would you... well, you've never made sense before. Never mind.

I put on my clothes all huffily and then stomped out. Draco ran out even though he was naked. He had a really big you-know-what but I was too mad to care. I stomped out and did so until I was in Vampire's classroom where he was having a lesson with Professor Snape and some other people.


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