My Immortal- With my commentary >:D

Since I got so many comments/likes on my Lovestruck commentary, I've decided to do a commentary on the notorious "My Immortal."

All my commentary will be in bold.

Do not read if you feel like you will take offense. This is a joke served justly.
Also, there is some swearing in here, some on my part, some on the Author's. Just a warning.

Chapter 2

Chapter 2

AN: Fangz 2 bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da chapta! BTW preps stop flaming ma story ok! For all these grammar errors and stereotypical insults, I hope you step on a lego,

The next day I woke up in my bedroom ...And where else would you wake up?. It was snowing and raining again. I opened the door of my coffin and drank some blood from a bottle I had I just imagine you in a diaper drinking red kool-aid out of a baby bottle. My coffin was black ebony and inside it was hot pink velvet with black lace on the ends. I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun. Your average hoe attire

My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis is u! Like, omg!) woke up then and grinned at me. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation and black eyeliner.)

"OMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!" she said excitedly. "Yeah, he said I'm illiterate. Like, what does that even mean?"

"Yeah? So?" I said, blushing. Vampires don't blush, stupid.

"Do you like Draco?" she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room and into the Great Hall.

"No I so fucccking don't!" I shouted.Good God, it's just a question woman.

"Yeah right!" she exclaimed. Just then, Draco walked up to me.

"Hi." he said.

"Hi." I replied flirtily.^^ "No I so don't like him, Willow, like ew why would you say... Oh, hey Draco."

"Guess what." he said.

"What?" I asked.

"Well, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade." he told me.Yes, a muggle band is preforming in a strictly wizarding village. Seems legit.

"Oh. My. Fucccking. God!" I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR.

"Well…. do you want to go with me?" he asked.

I gasped.

I swear to fffff what is it with these people and gasping at the end of every chapter?!

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