My Immortal- With my commentary >:D

Since I got so many comments/likes on my Lovestruck commentary, I've decided to do a commentary on the notorious "My Immortal."

All my commentary will be in bold.

Do not read if you feel like you will take offense. This is a joke served justly.
Also, there is some swearing in here, some on my part, some on the Author's. Just a warning.

Chapter 1

Chapter 1

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!

Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way Dementia? You mean like when people have a lack of brain cells, so they can't remember much? That explains so much. and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) Sure, because when you were first born you had long black hair with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears This description gave me cancer and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!) Thank god, I'm free to go. I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fuccccking hottie. ....Incest for the wincest? I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England It's Scotland, you uncultured fuccck* where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots You sound like a stripper. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation I thought your skin was already pale white?, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. So hardcore -__-

"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy! Le gasp!

"What's up Draco?" I asked.

"Nothing." he said shyly.

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.

AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! Do you want to know?

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